It got so much better this time around—between being able to understand a lot of the setups and following the pacing a bit more attentively, I only have one/two very minor gripe/s.
1. The score is still really just okay. Far from what I'd expected.
2. The editing of the "what'd it cost" scene and the Porch scene felt very strange. Not bad, necessarily, but a little weird. I understood their purposes, and I do think they belonged SOMEWHERE, but they could've either been placed elsewhere or transitioned to/from a bit better. 

Overall, 19.5/20.